Submit your drafted thesis statement for your modern American author book. The thesis should examine the author's style and theme(s) developed. Feel free to write helpful comments on each other's thesis statments. Check back for feedback!
In Travels with Charley in Search of America, John Steinbeck's humanistic and conversational tone sets a realistic and free-spirited mood to the book, much like hearing a story from an old friend.
I'm wondering if you can elucidate the impact of the tone and mood....you say it's like hearing a story from an old friend. Is this a novel that is nostalgic? What do you think the author's purpose was?
Even your thesis has your voice in it- what's hear is good, but I think it needs to answer the "so what?" question at the end....this may allow your analysis to deepen even more....
In the "Fourth Hand," John Irving conveys the importance of family, redemption, and the pangs of loss through his characters by using his own real life experiences and causing mixed emotions throughout the novel.
One quick thing is to get rid of the comma betwee family and redemption and use the word and because the "importance of" part refers to two things in the sentence, not three.
the through his characters part sounds less sophisticated. Can you use the word characterization?
I love that you're getting real life experiences in there. Does this mean you will be using some textual evidence from your biolographical research?
The part "causing mixes emotions throughout the novel" doesn't quite fit. John Irving conveys this and that through his characters amd causing mixed emotions doesn't quite have the parallelism it needs... What is it you want to say about the mixed emotions....Does this novel echo life? Does it overdramatize? Does he challenge our ideas about something? The answers to these questions might help you add some "oomph" to the end.
In his whimsical yet allusive novel, "The Fourth Hand", John Irving manifests the precedence of redemption and pangs of loss in a family by connecting his characters to his own non fictional experiences, allotting insignificant characters their own storylines, and superfluous use of symbolism.
In J.D Salinger's "Franny and Zooey", Salinger's tone and use of imagery conveys the personal and theological struggles younger generations may face throughout life.
It is a fine thesis. When you are writing about tone, will you use Salinger's biographical info to help verify the author's attitude?
the personal and theological struggles younger generations may face throughout life.- For this part of the thesis do you want to bring in young generations, or do you want to stick to the characters of the text? What is it you really want to prove. I'm thinking the connection to younger generations might be an excellent conclusion paragraph idea to help bring you full circle.... I am also wondering if you will want to examine Salinger's diction. Is this book written in first person like Catcher in the Rye was?
Racism is a theme that pervades Toni Morrison’s "Song of Solomon" entirely; not only is racial tension thick due to the setting of the novel, but it also plays a large role in contributing to the sequence of events and the importance of symbolism within the book, based soley off of Morrison's personal experience as an African American female herself.
Novel titles get italicized! "Thick" tension can be reworded- it sounds a bit casual...same with "large role"
Do you need the "based soley....on Morrison's personal exp"? (you also don't need "herself") If you're keeping that, will you be working in some of the biographical information you researched? What do you think adding this peice to your thesis adds to the paper? What do you want to prove about it? That the story and her life are similar? If so, you need to get at the so what....
In the novel "The Sun Also Rises", Ernest Hemingway illustrates his views on high society by making his characters try to escape Paris in search of a more exhilirating adventure in their life and also by making his characters excessive drinkers which allows them to escape reality.
Ian, you need to get the stylistic elements into your thesis....the exhilirating adventure and drunk characters are elements of plot....How is he writing this story? You could use characterization....think about the powerpoint for Poe the other day....it can be an element of style...Let's talk more on Friday.
Norman Mailer is an exceptional writer who uses specific word choice to establish the settings in his novels and characterize the appearance, actions, and thoughts of each individual. Based on personal experience, Mailer wrote "The Deer Park"; a story with a clear message of growing up and reaching one's maximum potential.
I want you to jazz up "specific word choice"- what's specific about it? Can you integrate these two ideas into one sentence? I think what you need to do here is to reframe it...Characterization and diction used to convey..... I don't know this story, so I don't know if you can connect the two. Let's connect Friday.
In T.C. Boyle's "Talk talk", Boyle uses slight humor in his thriller to create a fictional story combining love, life, and law through his antagonistic way of writing.
Is this a novel? If so, italicize the title! I'm wondering what "slight" humor is....Will this one stylistic element be enought to give you many topics? Aha! Wait, the antogonistic way of writing comes at the end here...That needs to go up front with the humor. I think you can get more specific...I'm not sure what you mean when you say antagonistic way of writing- is he provoking the reader to do or think something? I really want to meet with you Friday to discuss. IT needs refinement, but you've got excellent ideas here.
Flannery Oconnor's sothern gothic novel, "Wise Blood", illustrates the struggle between faith and faithfulness as well as Christ's redemption of humanity through the literary devices of allegory, farce and grotesques.
Jonathan Safron Foer’s Everything is Illuminated, is a complex novel that transitions from each chapter into a different characters perspective as well as a different time period, enabling him to be able to covey the necessity of remembrance.
Italicize title:)This sounds a little choppy- what if you consider some word changes- Are you saying the narrator changes from chapter to chapter? Would you say this is disjointed? Can you get in her the connection between changing narrator and the need for remembrance? I'm wondering if this topic is big enough...you may need another stylistic element or another thematic effect.
I think my post just got lost...sorry if there end up being two. So, from chapter to chapter, the narrator changes, right? Would you say this makes the text disjointed? Can you get sharper, clearer language in here? I'm wondering if the topic is big enough- you may need another stylistic element or another thematic connection. I'm curious to see how the changing narrator connects to this theme of remembrance.
In her novel "O Pioneers!" Willa Cather's use of vivid descriptions of settings, thorough and elaborate characterization of each individual in the story, and subtle sense of irony contribute to the overall feeling of loneliness, isolation, and lack of control over one's destiny that is present throughout the book.
Any book with an exclamation in the title's got to be worth a read in my book. I'm going to suggest a few subtle changes: In her novel "O Pioneers!" Willa Cather's vivid settings, elaborate characterization (of each individual in the story- is this part essential?), and subtle sense of irony contribute to the overall feeling of loneliness, isolation, and lack of control over one's-- her characters'???their??? destiny. It seemed wordy. Do you like these changes? Is anything lost that you need or can be clarified. It is a big thesis- I'm wondering if it might be too big....You may need to shave it down as you go if it gets bigger than you first imagined. Excellent start!
Ken Kesey's "One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest" takes the perspective of an outcast to society in order to question the established line between insanity and sanity.
Italicize title! So the stylistic element is going to be narration? Are their other qualities that help establish this fine line beteween insanity and sanity? It doesen't feel developed enough. What about characterization?
John Updike's "Gertrude and Claudius" takes the time period of "Hamlet", its sequel, and makes it so the reader can connect it to the 21st century with its modern issues such as adultery and daily struggles of a family.
Italicize title. "takes the time period" is awkward phrasing. Are there any stylistic elements that connect to 21st century? Does he do anything in a new and innovative way? I think setting isn't going to be enough, and I'm worried that it will come across as more of an interesting element of plot vs. a tool of Updike's writing (stylistic element)....How would you describe Updike's writing? Is it complex, lyrical....? This is the angle I think you might want to consider.
Ray Bradbury’s use of symbolism, paradoxes and imagery throughout "Fahrenheit 451" portray the central themes of censorship, ignorance and the role of technology in a futuristic dystopian society.
This is an excellent start! I want you to consider the word portray...what other words make this sound like it's really something you can PROVE vs. state. The elements are all here, but I want you to use a stronger verb... Also, stick a comma in beteween two adjectives.
In "Lolita", Vladimir Nabokov's powerful writing shows through the narrative of Humbert Humbert, who uses humorous language and powerful wordplay to alter the readers' perception of him as an abusive pedophiliac.
Strong start.... I want you to consider the word "shows"- it is blah! I think you can jazz this up with a strong verb. Same with "uses". The wordplay is not humorous? Is there overlap here? I'm curious to see how you will structure this. I think you should avoid setting it up chronologically where we start with one perception and then change. The danger in doing this is that you can get lost in plot summary, and the paper is driven by the story vs. the point you're really trying to prove, which is the effect of humor and wordplay....
Tim O'Brien's "The Things They Carried" uses dramatic and heavy theme and mood through a collection of events to give the reader a feel for O'Brien's feeling and emotions towards the war in Vietnam.
This seems a bit cirucuitous. You might want to consider changing "heavy" for theme...and name the theme...Theme is not a stylistic element- so we need to restructure this....Mood and dramatic ________ something establish O'Brien's '___________ attitude about the Vietnam war. I don't think you need to use "the reader" and getting "a feel" lacks confidence! If you set up your thesis with strong, definitive language, it is easier to persuade your reader. Let's talk about this Friday!
In "The Assistant", Bernard Malamud uses his own personal background and religious affiliation to create a meaningful story, strong interactions between characters with conflicting opinions, as well as educating readers about anti semitism in the early 1900's.
I like all the ideas here....Will you use textual evidence from the biographical research? It is fine to do this, but you'll need a Works Cited page. Also, it needs to have a stylistic element in there...characterization? I'm wondering how he conveys the religious vigor....What did you notice about his writing in this novel?
Philip K Dick is an author that writes about science fiction events that make people think what life would be like if blank happened. In "The Man on the High Castle" Dick writes about what the world would be like if the alies lost WWII. Dick uses his development of characters to explain the plot and setting of this weird time.
I'm wondering if you meant to combine: In the science fiction novel "The Man on the High Castle," Philip K Dick uses rich characterization to write about _________________be like if the Allies lost WWII. - Say what he says it would be like....it's ok to describe it here.
I'm wondering if characterization is enough? Did you notcie anything else about his style? I want you to get the "weird time" bit in there, but I think you need to examine another aspect of his writing that develops the bizarre quality of which you speak...
In "Lost Memory of Skin", Russell Banks uses stylistic elements including run-on sentences, simple language, and repetition to portray the Kid's fear and describe his predicament effectively.
A few suggestions: In Russell Banks' "Lost Memory of Skin" run-on sentences, simple language, and repetition of ______ portray the Kid's- does the kid have a name? Stick it in if he does- fear and describe his predicament effectively.
I also want you to change the verb portray...can you make it stronger? This is somethign you're going to prove, so it should sound like the stylistic elements are actively working to develop theme.
You are missing the stylistic elements...I love the wording - subliminal theme....billergent aspects.... but you need to work in how some stylistic elements bring these two aspects about. What did you notice about his writing?
In Dave Egger's "Heartbreaking Work of Staggering Genius", Eggers uses ironic language to contrast Dave's actions in the story in order to develop his character. He also uses discriptive language to create emotion along with the death of his parents.
Let's work on integrating the two sentences: In Dave Egger's "Heartbreaking Work of Staggering Genius", he uses ironic language to contrast Dave's actions WITH WHAT? in the story in to develop his character- FEELS LIKE IT NEEDS AN ADVERB HERE; HOW DOES HE DEVELOP THE CHARACTER? AND discriptive language to create emotion along -do you mean OVER THE DEATH OF HIS PARENTS? with the death of his parents. THIS LAST BIT IS CONFUSING...CLARIFY Fine start!
"Native Son," poignantly written by African American author Richard Wright, portrays the image of a young black man who is lost in society, his morals, and ultimately himself. Through repitition, grotesque details, and strong symbolism, Wright conveys to the reader the image of what it is really like to be a black man living in a white man's world, as well as the internal struggle that a copiuos amount of people face, though in varying degrees, on a day to day basis.
A few suggestions: Through repitition OF?, grotesque details, and strong symbolism, Wright conveys- STRONGER VERB NEEDED!the image- OR IS IT A REALITY? of THE INTERNAL AND EXTERNAL STRUGGLES OF a black man living in a white man's world.
I thought the last phrases of your thesis were unnecessary- do you think they add something? Do you want to keep them? Are you trying to imply that this is common to most black people? You can, but I think it can get murky.
I think I forgot to do the second step to actually post it...I just clicked publish and thought it went through but I swear I wrote it. Try Two: Alice Walker’s use of symbolism, dynamics of relationships, and drastic contrasts between the past and present in her novel The Color Purple represent the evolution of women’s role in society and gradual change from them being victims of racism and sexism to being conquerors of their own destinies. -Chloe H.
A few tweaks: Alice Walker’s use of symbolism, dynamic relationships, and drastic-WONDERING IF THIS IS THE RIGHT WORD? contrasts between the past and present in her novel The Color Purple represent the evolution of women’s role in society FROM victims of racism and sexism to conquerors of their own destinies. I LIKE THE WORD CONQUERORS, BUT I'M NOT SURE IT FITS BECAUSE IT IMPLIES A DEATH OF SOME SORT, WHICH IS THE OPPOSITE OF WHAT YOU REALLY MEAN... YOU MIGHT WANT TO CONSIDER A DIFFERENT NOUN THERE.
ALSO YOU NEED TO SHAPE THE DYNAMIC RELATIONSHIPS SO IT APPEARS A STYLISTIC ELEMENT. YOU'LL WANT TO BE CAREFUL TO AVOID PLOT SUMMARY WHEN GETTING AT RELATIONSHIPS AND FOCUS MORE ON CHARACTERIZATION.
Truman Capote's mastery of story telling is depicted in the non-fiction novel "In Cold Blood," where Capote ties together the contrasting personalities of two cold blooded killers as well as depicts the tragedy and investigation of a gruesome, malicious murder of the innocent and unsuspecting Clutter family.
I think you can use a stronger verb for "ties together"- can you get this more precise. I think it's missing another component- how do the contrasting personalities affect out understandig of the murder of the innocent family? How is he using the contrasting personalities? To simply depict may ot allow you to really analyze it. Let me know your thoughts
IS this working alright?
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In Travels with Charley in Search of America, John Steinbeck's humanistic and conversational tone sets a realistic and free-spirited mood to the book, much like hearing a story from an old friend.
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering if you can elucidate the impact of the tone and mood....you say it's like hearing a story from an old friend. Is this a novel that is nostalgic? What do you think the author's purpose was?
DeleteEven your thesis has your voice in it- what's hear is good, but I think it needs to answer the "so what?" question at the end....this may allow your analysis to deepen even more....
In the "Fourth Hand," John Irving conveys the importance of family, redemption, and the pangs of loss through his characters by using his own real life experiences and causing mixed emotions throughout the novel.
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One quick thing is to get rid of the comma betwee family and redemption and use the word and because the "importance of" part refers to two things in the sentence, not three.
Deletethe through his characters part sounds less sophisticated. Can you use the word characterization?
I love that you're getting real life experiences in there. Does this mean you will be using some textual evidence from your biolographical research?
The part "causing mixes emotions throughout the novel" doesn't quite fit. John Irving conveys this and that through his characters amd causing mixed emotions doesn't quite have the parallelism it needs... What is it you want to say about the mixed emotions....Does this novel echo life? Does it overdramatize? Does he challenge our ideas about something? The answers to these questions might help you add some "oomph" to the end.
Excellent start.
Thesis re-do
DeleteIn his whimsical yet allusive novel, "The Fourth Hand", John Irving manifests the precedence of redemption and pangs of loss in a family by connecting his characters to his own non fictional experiences, allotting insignificant characters their own storylines, and superfluous use of symbolism.
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ReplyDeleteIn J.D Salinger's "Franny and Zooey", Salinger's tone and use of imagery conveys the personal and theological struggles younger generations may face throughout life.
ReplyDelete- Kate Sears
great word choice! sounds complex and sophisticated!
DeleteIan S.
I am very eager to read what else you have to write!
Delete-Adam B.
DeleteIt is a fine thesis. When you are writing about tone, will you use Salinger's biographical info to help verify the author's attitude?
Deletethe personal and theological struggles younger generations may face throughout life.- For this part of the thesis do you want to bring in young generations, or do you want to stick to the characters of the text? What is it you really want to prove. I'm thinking the connection to younger generations might be an excellent conclusion paragraph idea to help bring you full circle.... I am also wondering if you will want to examine Salinger's diction. Is this book written in first person like Catcher in the Rye was?
Racism is a theme that pervades Toni Morrison’s "Song of Solomon" entirely; not only is racial tension thick due to the setting of the novel, but it also plays a large role in contributing to the sequence of events and the importance of symbolism within the book, based soley off of Morrison's personal experience as an African American female herself.
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Novel titles get italicized! "Thick" tension can be reworded- it sounds a bit casual...same with "large role"
DeleteDo you need the "based soley....on Morrison's personal exp"? (you also don't need "herself") If you're keeping that, will you be working in some of the biographical information you researched? What do you think adding this peice to your thesis adds to the paper? What do you want to prove about it? That the story and her life are similar? If so, you need to get at the so what....
Excellent start!
In the novel "The Sun Also Rises", Ernest Hemingway illustrates his views on high society by making his characters try to escape Paris in search of a more exhilirating adventure in their life and also by making his characters excessive drinkers which allows them to escape reality.
ReplyDeleteIan S.
Ian, you need to get the stylistic elements into your thesis....the exhilirating adventure and drunk characters are elements of plot....How is he writing this story? You could use characterization....think about the powerpoint for Poe the other day....it can be an element of style...Let's talk more on Friday.
DeleteNorman Mailer is an exceptional writer who uses specific word choice to establish the settings in his novels and characterize the appearance, actions, and thoughts of each individual. Based on personal experience, Mailer wrote "The Deer Park"; a story with a clear message of growing up and reaching one's maximum potential.
ReplyDelete- Marissa H
I want you to jazz up "specific word choice"- what's specific about it? Can you integrate these two ideas into one sentence? I think what you need to do here is to reframe it...Characterization and diction used to convey.....
DeleteI don't know this story, so I don't know if you can connect the two. Let's connect Friday.
You've got lots of good ideas to work with.
In T.C. Boyle's "Talk talk", Boyle uses slight humor in his thriller to create a fictional story combining love, life, and law through his antagonistic way of writing.
ReplyDeleteIs this a novel? If so, italicize the title! I'm wondering what "slight" humor is....Will this one stylistic element be enought to give you many topics? Aha! Wait, the antogonistic way of writing comes at the end here...That needs to go up front with the humor. I think you can get more specific...I'm not sure what you mean when you say antagonistic way of writing- is he provoking the reader to do or think something? I really want to meet with you Friday to discuss. IT needs refinement, but you've got excellent ideas here.
DeleteFlannery Oconnor's sothern gothic novel, "Wise Blood", illustrates the struggle between faith and faithfulness as well as Christ's redemption of humanity through the literary devices of allegory, farce and grotesques.
ReplyDeletePaige C
Besides spelling and putting the title in italics, this is quite fine. I'm curious to see how you will break apart into different paragraphs...
DeleteExcellent start.
Jonathan Safron Foer’s Everything is Illuminated, is a complex novel that transitions from each chapter into a different characters perspective as well as a different time period, enabling him to be able to covey the necessity of remembrance.
ReplyDeleteSamantha N
Italicize title:)This sounds a little choppy- what if you consider some word changes- Are you saying the narrator changes from chapter to chapter? Would you say this is disjointed? Can you get in her the connection between changing narrator and the need for remembrance? I'm wondering if this topic is big enough...you may need another stylistic element or another thematic effect.
DeleteI think my post just got lost...sorry if there end up being two. So, from chapter to chapter, the narrator changes, right? Would you say this makes the text disjointed? Can you get sharper, clearer language in here? I'm wondering if the topic is big enough- you may need another stylistic element or another thematic connection. I'm curious to see how the changing narrator connects to this theme of remembrance.
DeleteIn her novel "O Pioneers!" Willa Cather's use of vivid descriptions of settings, thorough and elaborate characterization of each individual in the story, and subtle sense of irony contribute to the overall feeling of loneliness, isolation, and lack of control over one's destiny that is present throughout the book.
ReplyDeleteKatie C
Any book with an exclamation in the title's got to be worth a read in my book. I'm going to suggest a few subtle changes:
DeleteIn her novel "O Pioneers!" Willa Cather's vivid settings, elaborate characterization (of each individual in the story- is this part essential?), and subtle sense of irony contribute to the overall feeling of loneliness, isolation, and lack of control over one's-- her characters'???their??? destiny.
It seemed wordy. Do you like these changes? Is anything lost that you need or can be clarified. It is a big thesis- I'm wondering if it might be too big....You may need to shave it down as you go if it gets bigger than you first imagined. Excellent start!
Ken Kesey's "One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest" takes the perspective of an outcast to society in order to question the established line between insanity and sanity.
ReplyDeleteChloe L
Italicize title! So the stylistic element is going to be narration? Are their other qualities that help establish this fine line beteween insanity and sanity? It doesen't feel developed enough. What about characterization?
DeleteJohn Updike's "Gertrude and Claudius" takes the time period of "Hamlet", its sequel, and makes it so the reader can connect it to the 21st century with its modern issues such as adultery and daily struggles of a family.
ReplyDeleteTroy T.
either put a semicolon after "Hamlet" or split it up into two sentences. also put "that" between "it" and "so". well writen though!
DeleteIan S.
Italicize title. "takes the time period" is awkward phrasing. Are there any stylistic elements that connect to 21st century? Does he do anything in a new and innovative way? I think setting isn't going to be enough, and I'm worried that it will come across as more of an interesting element of plot vs. a tool of Updike's writing (stylistic element)....How would you describe Updike's writing? Is it complex, lyrical....? This is the angle I think you might want to consider.
DeleteRay Bradbury’s use of symbolism, paradoxes and imagery throughout "Fahrenheit 451" portray the central themes of censorship, ignorance and the role of technology in a futuristic dystopian society.
ReplyDelete~Mitchell K.
This is an excellent start! I want you to consider the word portray...what other words make this sound like it's really something you can PROVE vs. state. The elements are all here, but I want you to use a stronger verb... Also, stick a comma in beteween two adjectives.
DeleteIn "Lolita", Vladimir Nabokov's powerful writing shows through the narrative of Humbert Humbert, who uses humorous language and powerful wordplay to alter the readers' perception of him as an abusive pedophiliac.
ReplyDeleteStrong start.... I want you to consider the word "shows"- it is blah! I think you can jazz this up with a strong verb. Same with "uses". The wordplay is not humorous? Is there overlap here? I'm curious to see how you will structure this. I think you should avoid setting it up chronologically where we start with one perception and then change. The danger in doing this is that you can get lost in plot summary, and the paper is driven by the story vs. the point you're really trying to prove, which is the effect of humor and wordplay....
DeleteTim O'Brien's "The Things They Carried" uses dramatic and heavy theme and mood through a collection of events to give the reader a feel for O'Brien's feeling and emotions towards the war in Vietnam.
ReplyDeleteJack McDonald
This seems a bit cirucuitous. You might want to consider changing "heavy" for theme...and name the theme...Theme is not a stylistic element- so we need to restructure this....Mood and dramatic ________ something establish O'Brien's '___________ attitude about the Vietnam war. I don't think you need to use "the reader" and getting "a feel" lacks confidence! If you set up your thesis with strong, definitive language, it is easier to persuade your reader. Let's talk about this Friday!
DeleteIn "The Assistant", Bernard Malamud uses his own personal background and religious affiliation to create a meaningful story, strong interactions between characters with conflicting opinions, as well as educating readers about anti semitism in the early 1900's.
ReplyDeleteI like all the ideas here....Will you use textual evidence from the biographical research? It is fine to do this, but you'll need a Works Cited page. Also, it needs to have a stylistic element in there...characterization? I'm wondering how he conveys the religious vigor....What did you notice about his writing in this novel?
DeleteLet's talk Friday!
Philip K Dick is an author that writes about science fiction events that make people think what life would be like if blank happened. In "The Man on the High Castle" Dick writes about what the world would be like if the alies lost WWII. Dick uses his development of characters to explain the plot and setting of this weird time.
ReplyDeleteBrian Carens
I'm wondering if you meant to combine: In the science fiction novel "The Man on the High Castle," Philip K Dick uses rich characterization to write about _________________be like if the Allies lost WWII. - Say what he says it would be like....it's ok to describe it here.
DeleteI'm wondering if characterization is enough? Did you notcie anything else about his style? I want you to get the "weird time" bit in there, but I think you need to examine another aspect of his writing that develops the bizarre quality of which you speak...
In "Lost Memory of Skin", Russell Banks uses stylistic elements including run-on sentences, simple language, and repetition to portray the Kid's fear and describe his predicament effectively.
ReplyDeleteA few suggestions:
DeleteIn Russell Banks' "Lost Memory of Skin" run-on sentences, simple language, and repetition of ______ portray the Kid's- does the kid have a name? Stick it in if he does- fear and describe his predicament effectively.
I also want you to change the verb portray...can you make it stronger? This is somethign you're going to prove, so it should sound like the stylistic elements are actively working to develop theme.
Strong start!
In Sherman Alexie's "Flight", the subliminal theme of Native American suffering helps explain the belligerent aspects of the main character, Zits.
ReplyDeleteYou are missing the stylistic elements...I love the wording - subliminal theme....billergent aspects.... but you need to work in how some stylistic elements bring these two aspects about. What did you notice about his writing?
DeleteLet's talk Friday!
In Dave Egger's "Heartbreaking Work of Staggering Genius", Eggers uses ironic language to contrast Dave's actions in the story in order to develop his character. He also uses discriptive language to create emotion along with the death of his parents.
ReplyDelete-Zach Hamilton
Let's work on integrating the two sentences:
DeleteIn Dave Egger's "Heartbreaking Work of Staggering Genius", he uses ironic language to contrast Dave's actions WITH WHAT? in the story in to develop his character- FEELS LIKE IT NEEDS AN ADVERB HERE; HOW DOES HE DEVELOP THE CHARACTER? AND discriptive language to create emotion along -do you mean OVER THE DEATH OF HIS PARENTS? with the death of his parents. THIS LAST BIT IS CONFUSING...CLARIFY
Fine start!
"Native Son," poignantly written by African American author Richard Wright, portrays the image of a young black man who is lost in society, his morals, and ultimately himself. Through repitition, grotesque details, and strong symbolism, Wright conveys to the reader the image of what it is really like to be a black man living in a white man's world, as well as the internal struggle that a copiuos amount of people face, though in varying degrees, on a day to day basis.
ReplyDelete~Shayna S.
A few suggestions:
DeleteThrough repitition OF?, grotesque details, and strong symbolism, Wright conveys- STRONGER VERB NEEDED!the image- OR IS IT A REALITY? of THE INTERNAL AND EXTERNAL STRUGGLES OF a black man living in a white man's world.
I thought the last phrases of your thesis were unnecessary- do you think they add something? Do you want to keep them? Are you trying to imply that this is common to most black people? You can, but I think it can get murky.
Hi Mrs. Stein i am 100% sure i posted my thesis but i dont see it here....
ReplyDelete-Chloe H>
I think I forgot to do the second step to actually post it...I just clicked publish and thought it went through but I swear I wrote it.
ReplyDeleteTry Two:
Alice Walker’s use of symbolism, dynamics of relationships, and drastic contrasts between the past and present in her novel The Color Purple represent the evolution of women’s role in society and gradual change from them being victims of racism and sexism to being conquerors of their own destinies.
-Chloe H.
A few tweaks:
DeleteAlice Walker’s use of symbolism, dynamic relationships, and drastic-WONDERING IF THIS IS THE RIGHT WORD? contrasts between the past and present in her novel The Color Purple represent the evolution of women’s role in society FROM victims of racism and sexism to conquerors of their own destinies.
I LIKE THE WORD CONQUERORS, BUT I'M NOT SURE IT FITS BECAUSE IT IMPLIES A DEATH OF SOME SORT, WHICH IS THE OPPOSITE OF WHAT YOU REALLY MEAN... YOU MIGHT WANT TO CONSIDER A DIFFERENT NOUN THERE.
ALSO YOU NEED TO SHAPE THE DYNAMIC RELATIONSHIPS SO IT APPEARS A STYLISTIC ELEMENT. YOU'LL WANT TO BE CAREFUL TO AVOID PLOT SUMMARY WHEN GETTING AT RELATIONSHIPS AND FOCUS MORE ON CHARACTERIZATION.
EXCELLENT START!
Truman Capote's mastery of story telling is depicted in the non-fiction novel "In Cold Blood," where Capote ties together the contrasting personalities of two cold blooded killers as well as depicts the tragedy and investigation of a gruesome, malicious murder of the innocent and unsuspecting Clutter family.
ReplyDeleteI think you can use a stronger verb for "ties together"- can you get this more precise. I think it's missing another component- how do the contrasting personalities affect out understandig of the murder of the innocent family? How is he using the contrasting personalities? To simply depict may ot allow you to really analyze it. Let me know your thoughts
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